01/30/2023

💎Student's Name: Sujeong Yeom
💎Date: 01/30/2023
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📝 TODAY'S LESSON:
Course: English Test Course
Book: IELTS
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🛠️ SENTENCE CONSTRUCTION

✖You said: For example, I saw my old colleague who collect money to celebrate her birthday with her friends in hotel, so she collect the money for whole year. And also, other friends who also collect money to travel abroad, so I think that kind of way is very reasonable.
✔Better say: For example, I saw my old colleague saving money throughout the year to celebrate her birthday with her friends in a hotel. Additionally, other friends saved up to travel abroad, so I think that’s very reasonable.

✖You said: I agree with the idea celebration become too commercial, because every special day like Valentine's day, Christmas day, and even the couple's reach 100 days since they start dating, they celebrate the special day, and they try to give somebody expensive present.
✔Better say: I agree that celebrations have become too commercial. Every special occasion, like Valentine's Day, Christmas, and even couples celebrating 100 days together / and even anniversaries, often involves the exchange of expensive gifts.

✖You said: And in the commercial advertisement, try to make people buy some expensive product and also there are many displays in the shops to make people spend their money.
✔Better say: Ads try to convince people to buy expensive products, and store displays encourage people to spend their money.

✖You said: It used to, but I don't believe it is make an effort for work life balance because there were tries that government try to make official work hours make increase from 52 to 65.
✔Better say: t used to, but I don't believe the current government is making an effort to promote work-life balance because it has tried multiple times to increase the official work hours from 52 to 65.

✖You said: Would it better to correct myself?
✔Better say: Would it be better to correct myself?
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🔴 Homework:
Please take note of what you learned in this lesson and apply it in your future conversations.
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Course: English Test Course
Book: IELTS